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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.
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The two pie charts illustrate the average
household
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 expenditures percentage-wise in 1950 and 2010 in a country.
Overall
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, in the given
period
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, the lowest contribution was made by the healthcare
sector
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. At the beginning of the
period
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, housing was the most significant
sector
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. In comparison,
at the end
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 of the
period
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 food, housing and other services became the largest segments in outlay.
Food
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The food
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sector
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 accounted for 11.2% of the
household
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's expenditure in 1950 and experienced a more than two-fold increase to 34% in 2010.
Household
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 expenditure from healthcare was 2.4% in 1950 and had a slight growth of 2% in 2010. At the beginning of the
period
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, transportation and other services spent up only 3.3% and 4.4% respectively, and these figures rose to 14% and 19.2% in 2010. Housing which comprised a quarter of
household
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 spending in 1950 fell to 22% in 2010. In 1950 the education
sector
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 was at 6.6% and decreased by 0.3% in 2010.

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