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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I agree that universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject. ​Male and females have got a very important place in communities. As university
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 is so important for the full bloom of one person's merit, skill and knowledge, equal opportunity for
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 male and female students should be ensured. A woman can work a job that does man,
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 as teacher, engineer, doctor, nurse. Women who have a quality
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 can raise their child well. That can help to develop the countries.
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 will ensure the women empowerment and the society would benefit from
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 arrangement. ​
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,
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 is a human right, like health, security. So, governments must provide equal
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 for
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 sexes.
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 can help
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 sexes to increase their communication skills when it comes to having closer relationships with the opposite sex. Definitely, students of these schools will most probably have less matrimonial problems in the future.
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, it may cause unrest in communities, especially for women and it may hinder the development of countries. If fewer females hold the important sectors of a country naturally women will feel deprived and
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 will lead them to compete with men. Some countries do not provide equal opportunities to men and women because of their religious beliefs.
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, male doctors are not allowed to become Gynaecologists, and
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 has increased the rate of mortality and morbidity of cases. In conclusion, universities should accept the same number of students from
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 sexes and give an equal opportunity at every level.
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