Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Other think that it is causing the opposite effect . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
technology
is developing faster than ever before. Unfortunately, not all of us have a financial opportunity to live in a modern high- tech world. When some people think, that
technology
make
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a gap between rich and poor humans,
other
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think it
cause
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the opposite effect. In
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I will discuss both opinions and try to find
a
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right view. With the developing of
technology
our everyday's
life
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becom
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become
becomes
more digital and a lot of modern devices are available.
Therefore
, our
life
is changing.
For example
, we use digitalisation on our workspaces and in our homes in order to make
lifes
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life
lives
life's
much easier.
In addition
, our
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habits
,
flavors
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, and goals are chaining as well. Majority of people living under the poverty line,
however
, still does not have an opportunity to use all modern devices due to its cost, so their
life
is much different. That may be a cause of
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increasing the gap between rich and poor people. At the same time, digitalisation makes lots of opportunities for poor people to communicate with those, who are rich. There are many examples, how an asking for help, job search, and even finding a soul mate has spread and been successful due to the Internet. So, in these cases,
technology
constricts the gap between people of different social backgrounds.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, most of
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available for
poverty- stricken
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persons
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devices help to understand what does rich
life
looks like, what do rich people dream and interest about.
That is
why I am convinced,
technology
binds all mankind together. In conclusion, technological progress has
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uge impact on our
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lives
life
life's
lifes
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lives
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,
although
it does not separate people. Due to the Internet humans have an opportunity to fraternize, to work and even fall in love with people of different
spocial
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social
special
status.
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