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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
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People are moving to cities in order to find higher-paying jobs and live a better
life
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.
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, due to pollution and overpopulation,
life
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 in cities is not as attractive as it was. In
this
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 essay, the reasons for the decreasing
life
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's quality and some possible solutions will be discussed. There are several issues which affect
life
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 in metropolitans, in which the most significant ones are different kinds of pollution and the uncontrolled growth of population.
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, cities are usually hubs of industrial, economic and services,
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 many of them face the issue of polluted air, sound and water. It is often because of poorly established policies, which allow factories being grown rapidly without any solution to control their waste.
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, it is clear that people usually move to urban areas to have better-paying jobs,
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 there will be problems like overpriced housing or unemployed. That means, for many immigrants, they may not improve their
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 but have difficulties in earning income. Several solutions for
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 issue may be implemented but it seems like rather than focusing on solving the problems in those cities, it may be better to give a chance to neighbour areas. By improving the industries in different areas, people may draw their attention to other areas than the overcrowded cities. It will reduce the population in large cities and
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 develop other places by providing skill workers from larger cities to others.
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, lesser population density
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 reduces housing price and the unemployment rate in the large cities,
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 improving
life
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 quality. To conclude, pollution and overpopulation are the main reasons
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 reducing the city's
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life style
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. There are several solutions and one possible one can be developing neighbour areas to attract workers from large cities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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