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Space travel has been made possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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development
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, it is believed that the day will come soon when people
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 in
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. In my opinion, while the
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 of
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travel
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 has positive impacts, drawbacks make it a negative trend. One of the possible benefits is that the
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 of
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 tourism stimulates the economy since it involves many different kinds of companies.
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 major scientific companies, small enterprises and
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 agencies launch into new businesses that are related to
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travel
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.
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, some companies extend manufacturing for new technology and equipment. And
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 agencies establish a subsidiary that specialized in
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 tourism. Expanding business promotes more employments and rapid companies' growth.
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, economic growth can be expected as an advantage of the
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 of
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travel
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.
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, I believe that negative impacts should be considered because developing
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travel
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 can deteriorate cosmic
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. Due to the
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, plenty of satellites and rockets are launched. Since these aircraft cannot be recovered, many
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 debris floating in
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. They can cause accidents
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 as collisions between
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 debris and the fall to the earth, which means that people's safety is threatened. The
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 of
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 tourism leads to a destructive
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 environment and harmful effects;
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, the trend is unfavourable. In conclusion, it is making an effort to the realization of
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travel
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 trend brings the economic advantage, I am of the opinion that the
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 is negative because of the damage
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 caused by the destroying of the
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 environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
  • Regulation
  • Sustainable practices
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