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In recent years, more and more people tend to live individually. What are the causes of this trend? Does this have a positive or negative effect on society?

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Modern lives have changed over the years and more individuals want to spend their life alone. Due to lack of
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 in the home town more people move out of
the
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their respective cities and
c
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ost of living is pretty expensive in the
metropolitian
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metropolitan
 towns which force them to live alone .
This
 might have some negative impact on society as adult
cant
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 take care of old parents and need to give them to old
age
 for well being .
Metropolitian
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Metropolitan
 have big universities ,greater job requirement which
attract
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 more individual ,
however
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 expensive to live with family in the
metropolitian
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metropolitan
 cities. cost of
one bedroom
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 apartment in
the
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 reasonable society is way more compare to
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countryside
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c
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ountry side .
This
 can be
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ain reason why few adults can't afford living with parents in the urban area.
For example
 a person working on minimum wage
such
 as 10 $/hour can't spend 2000$ for 2 bedroom house in
toronto
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 ,
hence
 they tend to live alone.
Mentality
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 of a person changes when they stay solo for
l
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ong time, they no longer feel the need
of
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 families and tend to cut all ties .
This
 effect society in
n
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egative way as old parents of a person look for their son or daughter to take care of them in old
age
. In lack of individual
resposibility
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responsibility
 and above scenarios
this
 gave birth to old
age
 homes in
u
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an
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rban area.
for example
 , a
milleninal
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millennial
 working alone in
b
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ig municipality cant take care
for
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 their parents who
lives
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 in countryside
hence
 they ask them to live in old
age
 homes. In conclusion, more population is bound to spend their day by oneself due to
c
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ost of living being high in the megacities.
this
have
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 a destructive impact on
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neighbourhood
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n
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eighbour hood as parents require their son and daughter attention in old
age
 ,negligence of
this
 caused the human to live alone in their old
age
 Homes .
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