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A number of tertiary courses require students to undertake a period of unpaid work at institution or organisation as part of their program. what are the advantages and disadvantages of the type of course requirement? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.

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Some programs in universities often require students to
work
 at an organization without being paid.
This
 kind of education has both advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, working during school
time
 is beneficial in various ways.
Firstly
, working at an organization not only provides students with a great deal of
work
 experience but
also
 helps them improve their communication skills.
Secondly
, students will have an outlook over the real world when they go to
work
 during
a
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cademic years, and
this
 helps students become familiar with society after they graduate.
Finally
, education will be more effective when people have opportunities to apply
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nowledge to reality.
For example
, economic concepts are extremely abstract.
Therefore
, if students are allowed to see how these economic ideas are used in practices, it will be easier for them to imagine and deeply perceive these concepts.
On the other hand
, going to
work
 during
a
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cademic years
also
 has some detrimental effects. One main drawback is that these types of
work
 offer no wages. Students will
therefore
 become frustrated easily and in turn
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they may drop out of their universities.
Also
, when students spend
time
 working, they will resort to another amount of
time
, which
otherwise
 is their leisure, to complete the assignments required.
This
 lifestyle may result in health deterioration in the long-run since students excessively
work
 and study. Another negative impact of
this
 educating method is that students may be exploited by managers of the organizations at which they
work
. In conclusion, while working during academic
time
 provides students with skills and experience, it
also
 brings about several drawbacks which should be taken into account.
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