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Some think scientists should be allowed to send messages into space to communicate with other life forms while others believe this is too dangerous. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is thought that some scientists need to get in touch with
ailean
Correct your spelling
Eileen
 species, while others think
that is
 too risky for human.
This
 essay examines both types of views, and I will give my perspective below.
To begin
 with, nobody can be certain who lives in space because nobody sees them and has no information about them. If that situation happens, a huge problem can be caused, which costs human life.
Therefore
, it is completely wrong to communicate with
ailens
Correct your spelling
aliens
. Individuals on Earth do not want to take a big risk.
Secondly
,
on the other hand
, it has a bright side
also
.
For example
, if we can find an alien and they are friendly with Earth, people would live a better world because maybe they give to a human about their uninnovated technology.
Also
, economical aspects, researching and development can make a lot of job opportunities for people. That R&D organisation
such
 as NASA needs good manpower obviously because they keep going their work. According to a survey conducted by a local newspaper named 'BULLET TIMES' in 2018 approximately 80% of respondents answered 'agree' to question 'Do you agree with a project that tries to touch with other life forms in space?'
This
 result means people live on the Earth, they would like to touch with ailean and they wondering a space.
Finally
, in my opinion, researching and development need to human life because it will give a lot of advantages more than disadvantages. I always imagine living on Mars.
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