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Some people believe that dangerous criminals should spend their rest of their lives in prison, while others think that everyone deserves a second chance and that these offenders should be reintegrated into society. What is your opinion?

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In the world where crime seems to gloomily be on the increase, what to do with inmates after they serve their sentence has become a controversial issue. There are mainly two lines of thought. One that suggests that dangerous criminals should be kept in captivity for the rest of their lives and the other that believes to reintegrate them into society. Understandably, those who support the life sentence have strong motives to hold that opinion. Minacious felons cannot be allowed to roam freely even after they served punishment. As per the Indian Police Service research, 50% of the inmates are re-offenders.
Hence
, it is risky to decide to reintegrate them into society.
Moreover
, law-abiding citizens might feel reluctant to have a person who transgressed law as their neighbour. On the flip side, there are always groups of philanthropists who believe in
second
 chance. Their argument is, convicts can never correct or prove themselves right if they were not given an opportunity and any person cannot be punished forever regardless of the severity of the crime.
For instance
, BBC telecasted a documentary with a criminal who started the NGO to serve the needy.
Thus
,
such
 cases witness the advantage of giving criminals a chance. In my perspective, it is difficult to choose a side in regards to
this
 issue. In one way, I too feel giving a
second
 chance, but not at the cost of innocent victims. I think that each case should be treated independently and enough filters should be put in place to make sure convicts who are freed do not re-offend.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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