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Some people think that morning gymnastics in school should be mandatory for students.

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It is well-known that being active during a
day
 and exercising even fifteen minutes per
day
 can boost up your physical health. It does not matter whether people go to school or to work, sometimes they tend to forget about it because of their very tight and busy daily schedule.
That is
 why some think that morning warm-ups in schools should be obligatory for students. There are advantages and disadvantages to
this
 motion.
To begin
 with, it is important to teach young people the habit of morning start-ups. Once you are taught that from the beginning it will be easier for you to remember about it later in your life. Exercising would become a part of your daily routine,
such
 as brushing your teeth.
Secondly
, each person starts their
day
 in a different way. Some people may need more time to be fully awake in the morning, meanwhile,others may leave the bed and have the energy for the rest of their
day
. Morning warms up would help every student to be entirely wakened up and ready for the lessons.
However
, mandatory exercising is good for students that do not do it by themselves. Part of scholars trains different sports like tennis or karate, so the short morning warm-up in school would be useless for them and may feel like the waste of time.
Furthermore
, when being already in school and done with the morning gymnastics students may want to take a shower and refresh a little bit. No one would want to sit the whole
day
 in class and feel sweaty and stale. Before every student would be ready again to start a lesson, a lot of time would be wasted. In conclusion, even if exercising is very important, in my opinion,it should not be forced in schools. There are different ways to encourage young people to be active and take care of their bodies and themselves. Making some compulsory will almost never work and usually just discourage people from doing it.
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