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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Nowadays, studying abroad is becoming always simpler, the academic language became English.
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, more and more students have the possibility to move to another
country
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 without knowing the official language of the state.
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, the number of scholarship for foreign students is growing, giving the opportunity to study
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a larger amount of people. Let's begin with the advantages. Studying away from your
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 gives the opportunity to get in touch with new people from other countries and to apply for a university which is more self-centred in your degree.
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, if you live in a small
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 there would not be every type of degree and moving to another
country
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 could solve your desire to study what you really want.
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, studying abroad has some drawbacks as well. Not everyone can afford to pay the rent for an apartment and the university fees. In some cases there could be the same grants but not for all the students.
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, the missing from home is a serious problem because it can lead to
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 not focused on the study workload.
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, there are some moments when you feel alone and some support from the family would be nice, especially if it is the
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 time away from home or you are young. In conclusion, making the decision to move away for studying might be very grateful for your personal experience. But you have to take into account different aspects and once you get there you should not come back home for a while.
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