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Some people think that the best way to learn about business is to study a course at college or university. Others believe that there are other better ways to learn about business. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Having enough
knowledge
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 on how to manage a
business
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 is an important matter to maintain companies’ sustainability in the long term. Some individuals argue that being taught in degree-level institutions is the most effective way to understand
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business
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 while others believe that other methods are better. Studying
business
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 in universities/colleges gives students a good level of
knowledge
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 but does not provide hands-on experience. Colleges and Universities have an enormous quantity of materials and lectures that can help students to learn about how to run a company.
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, there are not many practical experiments inside of companies.
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 puts students far from the real world of
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 management as the companies need workers with certain expertise and previous experience. Other ways of learning can faster provide
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knowledge
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 even if people have not attended tertiary studies. Some people can learn from the inside of companies. If an employee gets a job soon after high school and if he/her understands how the company manages its problems and solutions, there will be a constant process of learning while doing their work and,
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, they will know how to administrate the
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.
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, studying in universities or colleges can help individuals to understand how to run a company or to become experts in the
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.
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, I believe that other methods are more effective since people will not need to spend many years of their lives only studying, but learning in practically-format inside of companies. As a conclusion,
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knowledge
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 can be learnt through studies in colleges and universities, I strongly believe that other ways of learning are better because employees can acquire necessary
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 while they work.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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