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Band 7

You recently started commuting to work by bicycle and discovered that there is a problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter, •explain the reason for using a  bicycle to commute •mention what problems you have encountered with parking •what you recommend to solve the problems

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my concerns regarding the bicycle parking facilities near the building where I work. Recently, I started travelling to work by bicycle because it is the most efficient way to move around City XXX. Our city is very crowded in the morning and afternoon, so cycling allows me to avoid the daily traffic congestion. I usually park it in the parking lot near my workplace.
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, I have experienced several issues with parking facilities.
Firstly
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, there are not enough dedicated parking racks for bicycles , which means if I arrive late, I can not find a parking space.
Secondly
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, the parking area is not clean , and there is waste scattered around. I would be grateful if you could take action to resolve these issues. I recommend increasing the number of
bicyce
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bicycle
 parking racks in the area. I
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 kindly request that the parking area be cleaned regularly. Thank you very much for your understanding. I look forward to a prompt response. Yours faithfully, LLL AAA

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grammar
Spelling mistakes like 'bicyce' and some word choice. Check your spell and use simple words.
structure
Make each paragraph hold one main idea. Start with why you bike, then the problems, then the fix.
tone
Be a bit more direct and short. Say what you want and when you want it.
content
The letter has three clear parts: why you bike, the problems, and a fix.
tone
Polite and respectful tone.
organization
The letter is neatly laid out and shows a plan to fix the issue.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bicycle
  • bike
  • commute
  • health
  • money
  • city
  • traffic
  • environment
  • parking
  • space
  • rack
  • stand
  • lock
  • secure
  • theft
  • weather
  • cover
  • shelter
  • sign
  • signage
  • lighting
  • CCTV
  • permit
  • system
  • plan
  • proposal
  • improve
  • solution
  • issue
  • block
  • access
  • entrance
  • rules
  • survey
  • meeting
  • contact
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