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`You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You know find that you cannot continue the course. Write the letter to the course tutor. In your letter: -Describe your situation -Explain why you cannot continue at this time -Say what action you would like to do

#`you #job #course #tutor #-describe #situation #-explain #time #-say #action
Hello Sir I am writing
this
 letter in regards to inform you about the change, as I am unable to carry on with
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the french
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french
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French
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 learning course in the evenings
due to
 some reason. I am working full-
time
 as a PSW at a retirement home and my job requires attention
and
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apply
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I am finding it difficult to manage both studying and learning at
a
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the
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 same
time
. The main reason behind dropping out of
this
 course at
this
time
 is that French is
very
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 tough language to learn and it requires
lot
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a lot
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 of practice, learning and focus
However
,after
work
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work,
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 I feel tired, exhausted and lack of concentration. The shortage of
time
makes
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 it more tough as
i
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I
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 did not get enough
time
 to do basic things for myself. So, I would like to terminate the course
in
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two weeks after the first stage exam.So, that
i
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I
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 can evaluate my learning up until now. I
also
 like to join back in
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summers
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along with
full
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time
 studies so that
i
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I
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 can concentrate properly on
studies
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my studies
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. Yours Sincerely, Harshit
kaur
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph distinctly covers a single idea. For instance, the explanation of the problem and the reason for quitting could be separated.
logical structure
Work on sentence structure and grammar for better clarity and accuracy.
complete response
Discuss how you plan to manage your time better before rejoining the course to provide a more complete response.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and courteous greeting and closing.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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