Nowadays, many people use the Internet to get medical advice instead of going to see a doctor. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In
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day and age, a number of people prefer to
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consult
with
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doctors
via the internet rather than provide their physical
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presence
in hospitals. I consider that
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positive trend
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great potential to rase due to the development of modern technologies.
To begin
with, It is true that in the Internet age we can barely find any people without gadgets and especially with phones.
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as
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nternet, computer or
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pads
iPad
have changed the way in which people operate in their everyday life; studying, socializing and working. The medical consultations are
also
affected by
this
revolution. The seniors like
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grandparents
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direct
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accessibility
to communicate with doctors and nurses without even going out from their home.
Therefore
, during
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coronavirus
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a great
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of elderly people had an urgent need to come into the contact with hospital staff in order to undertake their health condition. Some of them were in a risk-
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category
of people, who can
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easily
be
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enacted
infected
, so it was extremely important that they would be provided with all
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supplements
and instructions
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from
medical staff.
On the other hand
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also
have a tremendous
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contribution
to medical
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advancement
. People, in fact, find the communication through the computers much more convenient as they do not even
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to drive to
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ospital, waste their time to stand in rows and undergo the appropriate
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process until the doctor will
finally
be able to meet them.
Moreover
, the
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assignment
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ew fields to complete namely personal information or identification, and client's health complaints as well.
Thus
, the technologies and recent
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have a pivotal role to play in people's lives. To conclude, I believe that medical consultations will be modernized as their necessity will probably increase among
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ommunity in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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