1.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package
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Improvement Suggestions
5For Task Achievement, ensure that each bullet point is fully expanded upon with sufficient detail and development. This includes elaborating on the specific reasons for leaving the job, providing more details about the new job, and explaining the significance of the salary package.
To improve Coherence and Cohesion, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more clearly. Additionally, aim for a logical progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next, and make sure each paragraph is centered around a single clear theme.
For Logical Structure, try to introduce the topic in a more engaging way and ensure the conclusion of your letter neatly wraps up your points. This will make your letter read more cohesively.
Regarding Greeting and Closing, maintain the informal but respectful tone appropriate for a letter to a friend. You've done well by using 'Dear Rina' and closing with 'Regards,' but consider adding a bit more warmth or personality to reflect the friendly nature of the correspondence.
When discussing a single idea per paragraph, enhance clarity by dedicating one paragraph to each topic introduced by the bullet points in the prompt. Distinct separation and focused development of ideas will improve readability and organization.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite