1.You have joined a new job recently. Write to your friend about your new job. In your letter •describe the reason for quitting the previous job •show your excitement for a new job and other details •say about your salary package
Dear Rina ,
Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
letter to inform you about my recent job
change.
To begin
with , I left my last
job
almost one month ago because of the relocation of the company
's head office. My company
got shifted from Chandigarh sector 21 to IT DZone which is very far from my house.for
this
reason I left my job
.
Secondly
, Last
week I got a new job
in a reputed multinational company
. In my previous organization, I worked as a Talent Acquisition but new company
I got selected as an HR generalist . This
position helps me to enhance my skills for the future .
Last
but not least I got a 50% hike on my CTC . Now my package is almost equal to you.
Let's make a plan to meet Change preposition
at
on
the weekend . Please let me know if you are free.
Waiting for reply
Regards
PriyChange preposition
at
Submitted by preetiaug25 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Task Achievement
For Task Achievement, ensure that each bullet point is fully expanded upon with sufficient detail and development. This includes elaborating on the specific reasons for leaving the job, providing more details about the new job, and explaining the significance of the salary package.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve Coherence and Cohesion, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more clearly. Additionally, aim for a logical progression of ideas from one paragraph to the next, and make sure each paragraph is centered around a single clear theme.
Logical Structure
For Logical Structure, try to introduce the topic in a more engaging way and ensure the conclusion of your letter neatly wraps up your points. This will make your letter read more cohesively.
Greeting and Closing
Regarding Greeting and Closing, maintain the informal but respectful tone appropriate for a letter to a friend. You've done well by using 'Dear Rina' and closing with 'Regards,' but consider adding a bit more warmth or personality to reflect the friendly nature of the correspondence.
Single Idea per Paragraph
When discussing a single idea per paragraph, enhance clarity by dedicating one paragraph to each topic introduced by the bullet points in the prompt. Distinct separation and focused development of ideas will improve readability and organization.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite