Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people argue that
zoos
must not exist because it is not fair and they have to be free and not in the cage. Others believe that zoos
play a significant role in keeping them and giving shelter to wild animals
. I believe that keeping animals
in zoos
are
not necessary.
On the one hand, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
zoos
have been always good places for human entertainment but nowadays, due to
the advent of the internet, people can easily follow many kinds of animals
on the internet and TV shows where animals
in freedom in their own habitats. So, in fact, it is possible to find out about different animals
without the necessity to go to a place to see animals
suffering from unsuitable conditions. In Iran, there was a rare tiger which died last
year in bad condition and a cage was not enough to keep the tiger healthy and welfare. In my opinion, these kinds of animals
should not stay enclosed in zoos
in the middle of the cities.
On the other hand
, zoos
could be used to keep endangered animals
, protect them and reproduce them. However
, I think there are other ways to protect them from hunters like protecting natural habitats. In Argentina, there are two projects to save wild animals
where biologists and veterinarians work together to protect a special kind of animal instead
of keeping them in man-made places.
In conclusion, zoos
are cruel and used as human entertainment, however
, they are extremely useful if they are used for reproduction and as a refuge for animals
in danger.Submitted by writing9.pry221 on
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to expand on your thesis statement in the introduction for a clearer structure.
task achievement
Provide more detailed examples to strengthen your argument, particularly from diverse sources or scenarios.
task achievement
Consider addressing potential counterarguments to provide a more balanced response.
task achievement
The essay effectively presents both sides of the argument on zoos, which fulfills the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your position while acknowledging the potential usefulness of zoos in conservation efforts.
coherence cohesion
The essay uses a logical structure, progressing from arguments against zoos to those in their favor.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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