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Some people think that the most important function of music is to help people relax.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In general,
music
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 plays a vital role in our everyday life.It is said to be the purest form of arts but it is often claimed that the main purpose of
music
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 is to make people feel relax.As for my opinion, the power of
music
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 is beyond every
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. Without any doubts, it is a sure thing that there is no day when a person does not listen to
music
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 not even once and
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 is really helpful for them to reduce their stress after a tiring day.
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 makes them mentally refreshed and
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 enhance their moods.
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, I am really passionate
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 rock I either listen
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them or record collabs with the help of several singing apps.
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, it soothes my mind and helps to maintain a good vibe.Usually,people are always challenged by the fact that no one understands them or know how they really feel, so they turn to
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 and
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 it helps to express one's feelings.
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,
music
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 has proven its healing power in the medical industry to cure various diseases.
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,It is being used in treatments like
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 therapy and against the symptoms of various psychological disorders.It is not that we always use movie tracks and albums.Nature sings too.Every single sound
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 heard in our surroundings like the chirping of birds,the sound of rain and even when a glass piece is broken there is some sort of
music
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.In fact,humans are always surrounded mostly by natural
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. To conclude,I think that the most important function of
music
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 is to explain life,its beauty,meaning and feeling to the whole world.And indeed relaxing one's mind is just like the
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 lead role in a movie,almost equally important role following the primary basis.
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