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“Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school.” Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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One
school
 of thought is that the best
approach
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hild’s development is that if parents teach their children themselves at home.
On the other hand
, the
second
school
 of thought is that children should attend
school
 for their better development. There is no general consensus over
this
 and both approaches have advantages. Let’s see the advantages of the
first
approach
. It is understood that no one can better understand their
child
 except his/her parents. A
child
 is with the parents since birth and parents know each and every aspect of the
child
. While
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eacher has to teach the whole class and take every student along with including slow learners and fast learners. Whereas parents have one
child
 to teach and they can give him/her their hundred
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 attention. They can schedule the teaching as per their
child
’s pace.
Moreover
, parents can better look after the
child
. Another
approach
 is attending
school
.
This
 method has its own advantages. In
school
, a
child
 has to spend his time in the class with other children of the same age. He/she starts making new friends. They not only talk about studies but
also
 discuss other happenings around them. They share knowledge and information with each other. All the children take part in group activities including extracurricular activities.
As a result
, their confidence increases many folds. As we have seen, both methods have their own advantages.
However
, I strongly feel that it is very vital for children to attend
school
.
This
 way,
school
 and parents share the responsibility of development of the
child
 and it is the best
approach
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