Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

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Food
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is considered
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one of the basic needs to have a satisfying life. Preferences of consuming fast
food
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have become a new normal in many places. Some believe it can have dire consequences on
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and health. I strongly take a stand for
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statement, Junk
food
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may taste delicious but it has unregulated ingredients and the process makes them unhealthy.
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, the main source of receiving necessary minerals, vitamins and proteins to maintain good health is
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food
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. Quick
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can be ambrosial in taste but it has no qualities of it.
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, Hamburger, the most tempting quick bite for dinner for 5 out of 7 days by 72%
Americans
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of Americans
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,
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was tested in the laboratory by
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food
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a food
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and drug administrator to find out the nutritive value. Results from
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100 grams of the sample showed it contained 20 grams of sugar; 30 grams of salt;
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high levels of saturated and trans fats and low
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of proteins and vitamins which makes it addictive. Eating a high concentration of
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quick meals leads to heart
diseases
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disease
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, obesity and many more.
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, street foods are mostly made in takeaway restaurants or on the streets. Preparation is often done under no supervision by
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regulators which gives the chefs the freedom to reuse leftover oil or cook in
unhygienic
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an unhygienic
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place. In recent
time
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times
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, A press reporter covered a story of a street
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vendor who prepared
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above sewage. As his selling place was far distant from the cooked place the eaters had no idea of his cooking conditions and often
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ill.
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, quick snacks have overshadowed healthy
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for
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many locations. concerning health issues arising from
rigours
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rigorous
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eating habits from many lives. I have no doubt in the research carried out by the
scientist
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scientists
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and authorities that
such
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food
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leads to an unhealthy life.
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Task Response
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the negative effects of consuming fast food on lifestyle and diet. Ensure to include a clear opinion statement in the introduction and a conclusion that summarizes the main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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