¬¬¬¬¬Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sports and fitness are gaining a lot of popularity in the recent past as they benefit people in leading a healthy lifestyle. Some people believe that constructing more number of sports facilities helps in improving the well-being of
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, other people think that just by increasing the number of recreational facilities does not bring any significant change, rather, there should be many other steps taken. In my opinion, I agree with the notion that other measures are necessary and not just giving importance to sports.
To begin
with, any steps taken by the local government should benefit the overall population and not just one particular section of people.
Although
expanding the physical training facilities will help the youth, serious thought should be given if it helps the senior citizens of the country.
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group might need better hospitals, rehabilitation centres and availability of drugs at a cheaper price.
For instance
, in Singapore, there are several community hubs with fitness and sports options in them, but not every
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are fully occupied all the time.
Therefore
, there is no need to have more of
such
centres,
instead
, the government should spend the funds on improving the condition of hospitals or on providing subsidized medicines which will help the overall community.
On the other hand
, sports play a vital role in the development of children. Thinking about the future, building more
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branches will help the younger generation to be fit and develop a habit of a healthy lifestyle.
Also
, by introducing unique methods of exercise to different age groups in
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lder group of people. If people cultivate the habit of getting in involved in workouts or physical training sessions,
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will help towards the betterment of public well-being.
As a result
, the government can be a bit more stress-free in
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regard. In conclusion, I believe just by raising the number of sports or fitness centres will not be beneficial in bettering the public health condition. To see overall growth, it is important to stress on other factors like providing better hospital facilities and free routine checkups, to name a few.
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