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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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The competition among the juvenile has been increased at
such
 a pace that they used to be more stressful than the previous
generation
. Due to
this
, they need to suffer a lot in society and sometimes forced them to take a crucial step in
life
. In my perception, the existing situation is true and will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, regards to the teenagers, the mental
stress
 they are suffering is due to the current lifestyle.
In other words
, people generally prefer a good looking personality compared to the intellectual level.
For instance
, teenagers usually get inspired by today's era of filmstars and eager to copy their style, luxury
life
 standard.They want to look good in public and showcase themselves to become rich in a single finger snap. For that, they are really ready to do anything for getting fame and resulted in
stress
 and suicide. Some of them get surrounded by drug-addicted people and ruin their
life
.
Furthermore
, the cause of
stress
 is school homework and examinations results. More than that pressure from the family member and parents in order to proof better to the other classmates causes mental
stress
 among them. Previously, people were more engaged in physical activities and sports in school time and very few were interested in higher studies so that physical activities help them to be stressfree and healthy. As well as, the needs of the people were limited in the past
generation
 compared to the current generations.
Moreover
, technology advancement is responsible at some point, because teenagers wish for luxury gadgets and branded products. The fulfil these wishes they start running behind them and forget about the way of living worry-free
life
. To summarize, undoubtedly teenagers of the present
generation
 are more worried in
life
 compared to earlier
generation
 due to numerous reasons like family
stress
, luxury lifestyle, relationship and sex issues and social relationship.
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