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With the continuous progress of the Internet, WeChat has become more powerful and useful. Some people applaud its popularity but others oppose the overuse of WeChat. What is your opinion?

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We live in a century where technology is in continuous development.Some of us believe that it is better to communicate using WeChat and others think that we use too much
this
 way of communication.In my opinion,
this
 is the evolution and we have to accept
this
 development, we can see that as an improvement in our
life
, with a condition not to replace face to face conversations. Nowadays, we live challenging times and an area of new technology.Young people tend to use more and more the Internet in many purposes, to communicate, for sharing photos, locations, for video chatting.WeChat is very used by youngsters, is very popular even in the business area for video conferences and sharing documents.I believe that the Internet improves our
life
 and made it easier in many ways.People can communicate with their families and to keep in touch even if they are very far from their home.
On the other hand
, we have to accept that chating too much on the Internet can develop some problems regarding our health,
for example
,sedentarism is a phenomenon in our days.Some scientists explain that social networking could transform our personality into an ingoing person or antisocial.
Although
, the Internet is very useful people have to maintain a balance between virtual
life
 and real
life
. To conclude, the technology brings in our
life
 many positive things, but with one condition to know how to maintain an equilibrium.I hope that in the future to see more and more development in
this
 area,
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