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Forests produce fresh oxygen and participate in regulating climate. But every year tree cover of our planet is lessening due to deforestation. What are the primary causes of deforestation? To what results may it lead?

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Trees
 are important to make human health better and playing a great role to keep the environment clean. If
trees
 are lesser
then
 the human will face issues in breathing because
trees
 release
oxygen
 so, people can inhale. In recent times, urban and rural areas were not rushy and there were a lot of
trees
 everywhere and Jungles were there as well. People used fewer vehicles, especially in rural areas. Every individual enjoy to go by walk and inhale
oxygen
 in
this
 way, their lungs work better and they stay fit. The primary reason why it is changed? As the population increases, due to
deforestation
 human start living at those places. As population increase, so the number of traffic increases and
oxygen
 is less due to
deforestation
, mankind is suffering from different diseases. The main key issue is overpopulation, mankind is removing the
trees
 to make more space for living.
Trees
 absorb carbon dioxide and release
oxygen
, which is used by the human being. Forest keeps the air fresh. Our grandparents who use to walk in the morning they inhale
oxygen
 a lot and if there is lack of
oxygen
then
 they will face issues.
For example
, in my area, every year 5%
deforestation
 is happening which is a big ratio. Even we are not planting
trees
 in
this
 ration. The conclusion,
trees
 are important for human health and
deforestation
 leads to the lack of
oxygen
 and the dirty environment as well. If the tree will be cut down at the same speed
then
 we sure not able to enjoy our lives.
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