You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: Introduce yourself and your family Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find Give your preference for the location of the accommodation

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to buy a house in Sydney, Australia. I am John. Recently, I have got a job in Sydney. So, I am planning to move with my family. My two children and wife will
also
come with me to Australia. I need your help to buy a house in Australia.
Firstly
, I am looking for a two-bedroom flat.
Moreover
, a fully furnished apartment will be a good option because I don't think, I can spend much time buying the furniture and necessary things.
Furthermore
, it will be good if it has one playing room for kids and a balcony.
In addition
to that, it should have one parking space, as I was thinking, I will have to buy a car, maybe after two months. .
Although
, I have got a job near the Mascot suburb. So, it
will
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be great if you
can
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could
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arrange the apartment either in the Mascot or nearby suburbs like Glebe or Surry Hills because I don't want to move very far from my job location It will be helpful if you can help me to find
such
kind of an apartment. I will wait for your response. Your's faithfully Jawad
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task response
Include more details about the specific requirements for the accommodation, such as proximity to schools, public transportation, and amenities.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization and flow of ideas, using appropriate paragraphing and clear transitions between ideas.
lexical resource
Expand the variety of vocabulary used to describe accommodation and amenities. Use more specific and descriptive language.
grammatical range
Use a wider range of complex and compound sentence structures to demonstrate flexibility in grammar and sentence construction.

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