You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: Introduce yourself and your family Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find Give your preference for the location of the accommodation

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

letter to buy a house in Sydney, Australia. I am John. Recently, I have got a job in Sydney. So, I am planning to move with my family. My two children and wife will

also

come with me to Australia. I need your help to buy a house in Australia.

Firstly

, I am looking for a two-bedroom flat.

Moreover

, a fully furnished apartment will be a good option because I don't think, I can spend much time buying the furniture and necessary things.

Furthermore

, it will be good if it has one playing room for kids and a balcony.

In addition

to that, it should have one parking space, as I was thinking, I will have to buy a car, maybe after two months. .

Although

, I have got a job near the Mascot suburb. So, it

will

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would

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be great if you

can

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could

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arrange the apartment either in the Mascot or nearby suburbs like Glebe or Surry Hills because I don't want to move very far from my job location It will be helpful if you can help me to find

such

kind of an apartment. I will wait for your response. Your's faithfully Jawad

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Include more details about the specific requirements for the accommodation, such as proximity to schools, public transportation, and amenities.

coherence cohesion

Improve the organization and flow of ideas, using appropriate paragraphing and clear transitions between ideas.

lexical resource

Expand the variety of vocabulary used to describe accommodation and amenities. Use more specific and descriptive language.

grammatical range

Use a wider range of complex and compound sentence structures to demonstrate flexibility in grammar and sentence construction.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

201 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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