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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that data should be shared in the field of science, business, and academics, others suggest that some significant
information
 valuable and should not be freely shared. I agree that sharing
information
 in vital areas have great benefit to the World. It is clear that human encounter a new development almost every day and they contribute to the environment for moving forward in all areas.
However
, some researches require expensive equipment and experienced staff and some developing
countries
 cannot fund it. It is
therefore
 agreed that developed nations should freely assist other
countries
 in science, business, and education. Covid-19 treatment is a prime example, which is a fatal virus, and Chine and German scientists find out Covid-19 vaccination and they have sent it all over the World for human safety. Many people disagree and assume that some of
this
information
 consists of significant ideas and they should be sold to others.
For instance
, Coca Cola which is a prominent Junk food brand has never shared its significant formula because of
this
 it is banned in some
countries
. Despite
this
, people live in an
information
 age, and indisputably sharing what they find is one of the key factors to make a reputation.
For instance
, Elon Musk who is the richest businessman in 2011 and co-founder of Tesla cars upload all details of the electrical cars on its companies website to have a chance to maintain sustainable energy, and lots of
countries
 have incentives for electrical cars. In conclusion, while some people try to sell some
information
 to others, some still feel that humans should expectedly help each other. It is the main asset of human survival and a peaceful environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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