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Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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Nowadays, everything has become easier than before. The number of
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 who are suffering from obesity rapidly increases worldwide . There are numerous reasons could be put, but most striking of them are technological developments and an unhealthy diet.
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, effective solutions are considered as the development of sports in schools and try to eat healthy food.
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 with, it is a well-known fact that technology plays a crucial role in all aspects of life.
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, we are able to travel by technological tools or have access to information without any efforts in comparison to the past when the
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 had to be active all day.
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, it is inevitable that
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 will gain weight consistently because of an inactive lifestyle. Another reason why
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 tend to get fat from eating unhealthy
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 that lead to storing a lot more fat in our body. 
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, there are feasible precautions which enable
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 to deal with obesity problems.
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, school managements should increase the number of gymnastics classes in which students discharge their energies in a healthy way.
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, the government should encourage citizens to eat vegetables and fruits rather
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 of junk
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. Because many advertisements tempt
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 to consume harmful
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 and the government must ban ads that pose a threat to
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’s health. To conclude, thanks to technological improvements, individuals do not have any desire to act as in the past.
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,
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 that constitute an enormous threat to our body lead to weight gain. Governments can take precautions in
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 regard. Sports activities should be taken into account in the school program and
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 should be aware of the severe impacts of a lot of calories.
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