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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. What extent do you agree?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities
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Big companies can provide
sports
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 and social facilities for
people
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 who cannot afford it. It is not a big deal for them they can afford it easily and help
people
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 who cannot do it by themselves. they just need a little support. A family, who is suffering from poverty, they need a little help from big names to survive. Mostly, in rural areas these type of
people
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 found. If there is no one earning in that specific family, or they are earning less and can't survive in that money.
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, in 2020 due to COVID, many
people
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 were out of jobs and they are still facing issue to get good jobs and not able to run their families properly. In
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 situation,
such
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 big industries can provide social help for local
people
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.
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 help would not affect them a lot. In
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 way, they got a good reputation as well. As for as,
sports
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 are concerned, I know many youngsters who are good
in
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sports
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 but they cannot go in their specific field due to lack of money. The primary reason is the recommendation. In Pakistan, no one can expect anything without recommendation. So, the big names can help them by paying their fees to excel their future in
sports
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 and if there is any help needed, do them the same favour.
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, as per my point of view, I am totally in the support that big brands can help local
people
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 in need and keep an eye on them if they need any help.
Sports
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 are an important part of the country and if someone is interested in
sports
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 they should do their best in
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 regards.
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