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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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Although
, some believe that it is highly important to share scientific
research
data
 with other fields, others believe some
information
 is secretive and should not be shared. personally, I think that
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 some
research
work
 is ought to be hidden because it might be dangerous or used in a criminal way and to stop other unethical scientists to claim that it is their
work
. It is fair to believe that all
information
 should be shared about
research
 because that will accelerate the process and enhance the possibility that the
work
 will be successful, on other words, all
people
 in the same field will use the released
data
 to improve the possible results,
for example
, all doctors around the world shared any new
information
 about covid19 which significantly assisted the discovery of the vaccine.
Moreover
, sharing
research
 will help save it and prevent it from being lost because in
this
 case a lot of
people
 will have the
data
.
Nevertheless
, in a lot of cases cause feuds as it increases the ability bad
people
 to claim that
work
 as their own because all
data
 is available for the public which is significantly unfair to the original scientist. Another major reason why some
research
information
 should be secret is some
work
 is on dangerous areas like weapons or nuclear powers which can be exploited to hurt other
people
 or to win a war, as some scientist assert the creation of nuclear weapons was a clear example of how detrimental sharing science can be. To conclude, as sharing
data
 has a lot of benefits,
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 believe not sharing is the right way in order to cease the stealing of others
work
also
 to ensure that dangerous
work
 can not be used to harm
people
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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