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Some people think that for individuals, planning for the future is a waste of time. It is more important for individuals to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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Concerning the issue of whether
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plan
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 for the
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 or focus on the present, I believe that
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 definitely must
plan
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 for the
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due to
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 the following reasons. Planning for the
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 has a wealth of benefits. To start off with, a
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-oriented person possesses more clear objectives and incentives. It is a well-known fact that
individuals
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 who have goals know what they want, thereby having more certainty in life. The second benefit is planning for the
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 motivates the individual. As a matter of fact, most people’s motivation comes from their vision.
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, planning for the
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 makes a person’s development more sustainable. Indeed, without a
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plan
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, even successful people may feel disoriented and cannot understand why they want to be successful;
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, they may not be able to enjoy their success. I recognise that focusing on the present can reduce distractions and temptations.
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 is reasonable to the extent that focusing on the present makes a person more organised.
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, having said
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, planning for the
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 is still not a waste of time because
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 of
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 plans might result in irresponsible and unhealthy lifestyles. In conclusion, I would argue that designing a
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plan
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 is much more important than focusing on the present.
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, it would be generally advisable for
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 to
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 for their
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 first.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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