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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Few individuals believe that sharing all the details regarding scientific research,business and academic is a brilliant innovation.
However
,there is a debate that there is some information which is very significant for sharing it openly,
To begin
 with,advocates have thoughts about discussing all the information freely because by doing
this
 every single person will be aware of all the consequences.Even there will be less
work
 if
everybody
 knows all the strategies.
therefore
,people will give their best performance in every task.
For example
 ,an article was published in 'the tribune' in which it was stated that by sharing all the details particularly there are more chances of better performance and
everybody
 would be knowing all the results after the process.
Hence
,it is a positive development according to the supporters.
On the other hand
,offenders offend on
this
 statement as there will be no privacy for any
work
.Even,competition between the different companies will decrease because
everybody
 would be having the same techniques of doing
work
.
Moreover
, the chances of the duplicity of products will be more because anybody can apply the strategy easily.
For instance
,a survey was held at Columbia University in which it was discussed that to achieve more profits and better consequences there must be privacy in every organisation,
Thus
,there will be competition as well as profits to a company if they have they have their own particular technique to apply. in my opinion,all the details must not be shared freely because if everyone is having a constant strategy,the willingness of doing
work
 will decrease sharply.As the one who is perfect in some
work
 will not be appreciated globally and
also
,it will impact in a negative way to the employees of the organisation,
For example
,researchers discussed that every particular company have expert candidates in every different sector where they all are valued and given an appreciation of doing
work
such
 as,bonus.
Hence
,
this
 increases their willingness to doing
work
 constantly. By and large,every detail must not be shared openly but some scientific news should be shared because
everybody
 should be aware of all the scientific problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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