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An Increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online

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Presently, more and more
people
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 prefer to buy
things
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 what they need
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 shopping online. From my point of view, there are many benefits and drawbacks for personals and enterprises
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online. On the one hand, some
people
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 turn to buy categories on the website rather than a store because there are many advantages when they purchase
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online. The majority of
people
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 always use smartphones, so it is very easy to buy
things
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 in mobile applications, and the most popular applications are Lazada Shopee. Instance, when it is a special day many companies will have some special gifts or coupons to their
customers
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, so many
people
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 can buy
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 cheaper prices more than normal days.
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, it is not only
customers
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 have a good price but
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 many businesses have a lot of profits because if a price of categories is not expensive,
people
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 will order many
things
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 what they want, so
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 method makes more and more enterprises have many profits than before.
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,
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 strategy makes many benefits for both individuals and businesses.
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, some
people
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 argue that there are some drawbacks too because several
people
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 think that there are a lot of mistakes when they buy goods or clothes
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online.
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, some
customers
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 prefer to buy clothes, but they do not know what size which they wear, so when they order some clothes, they can not wear it because it is not fit or it is very loose. Some
people
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 want to change their orders.
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, some companies can not change it for
customers
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, so it makes drawback with business.
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, some goods are not good quality like that some producers said.
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, some
customers
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 get wrong orders, so
people
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 are very disappointed and they do not want to order
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 in
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 company anymore.
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, these are reasons that make some individuals and enterprises have disadvantages. To sum up, several
people
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 like to purchase goods on shopping websites. From my point of view, both
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individuals and companies have a lot of benefits and drawbacks.
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