Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Human beings have had to face different types of situations and the way how they have dealt with those events has determined their results. Many
people
argue that it is necessary to be comfortable with all sceneries, however
, I consider that humankind has to leave their comfort zones in order to search for new opportunities. In this
essay, I will explain my reasons in detail.
To start with, it is well known that in some communities, people
have to take advantage of any opportunity because it could be a unique way to find a job or complete their requirements for studying. This
means that most people
have no opportunities to follow their dreams or to establish other targets and they have to accept any situation. This
is mainly shown in developing countries with a big difference in socioeconomic conditions between the lowest and highest status. For example
, in Colombia, the rate of youngsters under 15 years that work to support their families has increased by 25% in the last
decade owing to the scarcity of economic resources.
Conversely
, there are many others that could leverage any kind of event and accelerate their growth. Nevertheless
, sociologist researchers have proved that almost 80% of the population is not aware of the myriad of situations that occur every day and how to learn from them. This
means that if humanity does not accept that reality differs from the way that is
typically shown, they will focus on specific details in order to gain experience or knowledge and reach outstanding goals. For instance
, most students at Harvard University have been chosen because of not only their academic merits but also
their integral analysis and competitiveness.
To sum up
, people
should leave their standard ways and search for ambitious targets, however
, many variables should be taken into account depending on academic, economic, social and cultural situations.Submitted by luciaagudelomotta on
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task achievement
Your essay effectively addresses both views of the topic, but try to balance the paragraphs more evenly. The second view could be expanded slightly to ensure both views are given equal weight.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence, and follow a logical order to make your arguments even clearer.
general
Be cautious of minor grammatical errors and strive to use a variety of sentence structures to keep the reader engaged.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both well-presented and clearly state your position on the topic.
task achievement
You provided relevant and specific examples to support your ideas, which added depth to your arguments.