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Some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it’s advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, living in skyscrapers is one of the most noticeable elements of modern lifestyles. While some individuals often feel alone and sad away from a traditional neighbourhood, many young
people
 completely enjoy their stay above the ground.
This
 essay will discuss how residents of big apartment
buildings
 can still maintain a happy and fulfilling way of living despite residing in high-rise apartments. There are multiple advantages of residing with a large number of tenants in a dwelling.
First
 of all,
people
 make friends easily with their
next
-door neighbours and spend quality leisure time. Research suggests that families with young children prefer a conventional lifestyle to typical houses because their children can play together in the common area.
Moreover
, the scenic views from many tall
buildings
 are absolutely breathtaking. As there is no distraction on the way, the clear view of
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un or rain makes
people
 joyful.
On the contrary
, it is hard to find spare time in the hectic lifestyle of our contemporary living. A number of critics describe apartment residents as selfish and uncooperative.
This
 is because the only time they could meet their neighbours in the lift and that's not enough to build
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elationship.
In addition
, car parking is being considered as one of the major demits of big towers which discourage families and friends to initiate regular visits to their loved ones. As human beings, we need that human touch and interaction to refresh our mind and put up with the daily schedule. To sum up, it is not easy to select our desired way of living while living in urban areas.
This
 essay has discussed
although
 living in high-rise
buildings
 can be enjoyable, there are some inevitable disadvantages like isolation. In my opinion,
people
 should make their decisions based on their personal circumstances and analyse the benefits and shortfalls of living in modern
buildings
.
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