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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

#people #city
People
 nowadays, tend to choose
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 in
the
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urban cities ,whereas , some others preferred to live in
the
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rural areas. In my view , choosing where to live depends on what livelihood a person is having or where they wanted to live. In
this
 essay , my own views and personal opinions will be tackled. On the one hand, certain reasons why some
people
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urban areas.
Firstly
, the easy access to mostly everything,
such
 as
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 commercial
businessess
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businesses
 like the malls,any type of stores and groceries,but not only that,is
also
 the access to transportation and almost everything.And
secondly
 ,even getting to the workplace is easier.Of course ,
however
,there is always a negative impact like
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noise pollution and the traffic.
On the other hand
,to live in the vertical cities where
people
 would find it livable , it is because of the kind of serenity in which they will have a more peaceful place away from the noise and anything
that is
 different from the life in the horizontal areas.
For example
, other
people
likes
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 to live close to
the
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nature ,
thus
 , they do not mind
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 they have to travel from home to work or even getting their basic needs. In conclusion, my personal opinion about
this
 topic is that
,
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anyone
have
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 their own choices and preferences where to live either in the urban or rural cities.I could say that, finding the place where to live is all about meeting anyone's needs and satisfaction regardless
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where it may be.Indeed, it is vital in choosing where to live.
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