Essay #2: More and more people want to own famous brands such as cars, clothes, or other items. This is positive or negative? Give out your opinion.

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Many people these days are wanting to own signature
clothes
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or
cars
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or any type of luxury items.Definitely,
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gives a positive and negative impact.In
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essay, I will tackle both the pros and cons
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topic. On the one hand,the positive thing in owning a branded item like expensive
clothes
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or vehicle is that it gives a feeling of happiness or even to feel proud of achieving
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luxury.After all the
hardwork
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hard work
,anyone deserves a prize.
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,a young
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businessman
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worked all the time with almost no break aiming to succeed.So when
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in fulfilling the goals, getting something as a prize would be worthwhile.
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,buying expensive
clothes
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and bags like Gucci and Chanel is a kind of reward to itself,as well as luxurious
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like Porsche or Mercedes Benz.
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,there is
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a negative impact
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buying branded items because it could affect the standard way of living.It means that
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some people tend to buy
high end
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cars
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or pricey
clothes
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just to show off and pretend that they could afford which in fact it does not really give a good impression.
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,it would end to
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bankruptcy
and debts.
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,an ambitious woman dreaming to have a signature bag like Chanel,
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getting an income but only enough,
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,would tend to buy
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. In conclusion,my own opinion is that
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there is nothing wrong
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purchasing branded items like
clothes
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or even luxury
cars
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if it deserves as long as for a good reason and worth to buy.Somewhat,everyone deserves a reward no matter how much it cost.
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