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Nowadays, parents are sending their children on trips abroad for educational purposes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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The world is rapidly changing and education contributes a major factor in the development of society .Studying overseas became a fashion for most of the
students
 in order to pursue their dreams .Overseas education benefits most of the
students
 by providing multiple options in various courses .
However
, the problem few
students
 encounter is that overseas studies are expensive .
This
 essay will
further
 discuss both views and will explain why studying abroad is more beneficial for most of the
students
.
To begin
 with,
Students
 may have a fruitful career by studying overseas as they get an opportunity to explore different courses as per their own interests .
For instance
 ,one of my sisters travelled to Australia to aspire her dream in fashion designing whereas,in India ,it wouldn't be possible .
Therefore
 many pupils are willing to travel overseas to have a better settlement in the field of their own choice. On the other ,hand,the drawback of studying overseas is that the cost is very high and
as a result
,many of
students
 apply to obtain loans from the banks by keeping their valuable documents as proof.
For example
, parents who do not have sufficient amount of money regretfully, borrow from others for interest to send their children to
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oreign land.Based on these reasons ,sending to overseas can become problematic . To summarise,many people travel abroad for studies as they can learn to live their life by achieving their dreams despite spending more money
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 a potential problem .Based on the pros and cons,I am totally convinced that studying ina
oreign
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foreign
 land will definitely is the best option for those who wish to have a successful career.
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