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Some high school require all students to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. which of these two school policies you think is better?

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Nowadays, youngsters want to use their freedom, especially at
school
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,
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, either to wear or not the
uniform
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.
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, there are some schools who implemented
students
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 to wear uniforms and follow the policy.
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, it is better to wear uniforms to most distingue either that person is a
student
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 in that particular department or not and to protect the
students
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 from being harass by pervert human.
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, it will uplift the name of an institution and gives honour.
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, wearing a
uniform
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 can help the teachers and faculty to identify if someone is a
student
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 in their institute.
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, in my university, we've experienced a lot of crimes like having many individuals entering the campus and do some bad activity, one
student
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 has been rape, another has been robbed because someone can easily get in due to not having a
school
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uniform
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. Teachers and staff didn't recognize those people because they blend to other
students
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 who entered the campus.
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, the
school
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 will be responsible for the accident and make the
student
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 wear a
uniform
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.
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, when you wear a
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, it will give you protection and respect.
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 happened when some
students
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 who went to the restaurant, the crew throw them away because he thought that these young people are a member of a gang. Whilst, wearing
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uniform
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 could prevent the
students
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 to be humiliated by others or misunderstood of who they are. In conclusion, schools should be strict in implementing rules and policies. Wearing a
uniform
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 is important, it gives respect to the
students
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 and especially it gives pride to the institution, knowing that you are one of the
students
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 in that particular establishments.
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