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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s digitalization world, nearly all individuals who have access to digital
phones
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 can capture and share photographs, which could be detrimental to the value of the work that professional
photographers
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 do.
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 essay vehemently disagrees with
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 scenario
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 the lower
quality
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 of
smartphone
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cameras
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, and folks’ lack of in-depth
knowledge
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 regarding photography compared to professional
photographers
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. To commence with,
cellphones
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cameras
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 have remarkably lower
quality
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 compared to professional
cameras
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. Since these types of
phones
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 are built for a wide range of usage
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 as making calls, sending messages, etc. taking a picture is not a primary utilization of a
smartphone
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,
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, unlike the professional
cameras
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 that are precisely designed and constructed with high-
quality
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cameras
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 to capture photos, the
quality
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 of
cameras
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 are not on a same level in these two groups. The pictures I have taken with my iPhone camera,
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, have significantly lower
quality
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 compared to those I have captured with my Canon professional camera.
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, those capturing a picture with a digital phone and sharing it do not have the in-depth
knowledge
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 that professional
photographers
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 have. Obviously, a well-known photographer has a staggering amount of
knowledge
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 on not only how to capture a picture, but
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 taking advantage of various tools to edit and share it
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compared to
 a random person with a
smartphone
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. A case on
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 point would be a glance at the high demands for professional
photographers
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 all around the globe for monument ceremonies
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 as a wedding party to capture and edit photos illustrates even with the accessibility to
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cameras
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 the work of professional
photographers
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 is not diminishing.
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, given the scenario above, everything can be recapitulated into the fact that,
although
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 in the modern world, those with digital
phones
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 are able to take and share photos, the
quality
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 of camera
phones
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 and the absence of in-depth
knowledge
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 are two fundamental reasons that the works of art that professional
photographers
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 do are not jeopardized.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance the coherence of your essay, make sure your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next. Use a wider range of cohesive devices and ensure that paragraphs are well-structured and logically connected.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that both the introduction and the conclusion clearly address the prompt. Expand your conclusion to not only restate your points but also to synthesize them in a way that underlines the strength of your argument.
task achievement
Develop your main points further by providing more detailed, concrete examples. Rather than making broad statements, showing specific instances where professional photography outperforms smartphone photography could strengthen your argument.
language
Your essay should contain complex sentences and a variety of grammatical structures. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and the overall clarity of sentence constructions.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization
  • visual culture
  • composition
  • lighting
  • technical skills
  • proliferation
  • oversaturate
  • niches
  • unique styles
  • replicated
  • high-quality
  • industries
  • underscore
  • showcase
  • collaboration
  • diverse perspectives
  • photographic landscape
  • amateur
  • professional
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