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Schools should stop using books for teaching children as they find them boring, and use films, TV and Computers instead. To what extent do you agree with this?

#schools #books #children #films #tv #computers
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It is becoming increasingly common for academic institutes to teach
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 through visual methods
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onventional book as it helps to keep
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 attention. I completely agree with
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 statement because a textbook can create a tedious environment and computers can provide more updated information. It is a well-known fact that experts and scientists wrote many
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 with important information. Indeed, there is good knowledge of textbook and teachers should know how to teach
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 in the best way possible. In private schools,
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, there are ways o teaching
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 using
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 and educational activities as a
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 tool as it can assist in
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 development.
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 attention for a long period of time.
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, a textbook can create a tedious environment but the teacher needs to perform a good technique to teach
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 . Despite these arguments, others, myself included, feel that
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, TV and other technologies can assist and motivate undergraduate to learn. Even though there are many
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 that can provide good knowledge for
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, visual educational methods can provide a similar or better experience for
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, a movie about historical moments can show
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 how people used to live in the past. In term of educational, a
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 can provide updated information and TV can create a better environment for
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. Clearly, technological methods can be more productive than
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. In conclusion, while
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 can provide many knowledge and good samples,
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 and tv would keep the attention of
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 in the classroom. In my view, I believe that a
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