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Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh disadvantages?

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It is true that economic
development
 brings a lot of benefits to
society
. While many
people
 think that economic
development
 has impacted the traditional values of
society
, and I believe
this
 phenomenon has several drawbacks than it merits. It is undeniable that economic bring up the living condition in many countries. More jobs have been created and financial ability has been increased for many
people
. A strong economic
country
 that the government can provide several of funding in each sector so the residents can gain the benefits from it. Take an example of Australia, the governments have provided
a
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completed welfare for their residents and it is because of their trading policy on economic
development
.
Therefore
, it is clear that a well economic
country
 can
provided
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 a well living condition for their citizens.
On the other hand
, from the opposite of the view that economic
also
 bring several impacted to
society
. When the economic become the main purpose of the
society
 that the basic moral might be lost. It is believed that moral principle has been ignored by it because
people
 tend to reach a higher financial status without moral consequences.
Moreover
, education is equally important to
country
development
. If a
country
 does not concentrate on cultivating more professionals, it is undoubtedly that it might be lost the value in
this
 competitive world. If more scientists or innovative professionals have been well cultivated. It is clear that can bring up the competitiveness worldwide. In conclusion, It is important that social values should not be ignored when
people
 are reaching a higher economic ability.
Therefore
, I believe that the drawbacks of developing a
country
's economy are outweighed its advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • economic development
  • quality of life
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare
  • education
  • job opportunities
  • unemployment
  • poverty
  • technological advancements
  • innovation
  • traditional cultural values
  • social bonds
  • material wealth
  • consumerism
  • social inequality
  • environmental conservation
  • wealth gap
  • vulnerable groups
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