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The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems.What are the problems ? In oder to reduce the problems should discourage people to use cars ?

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In the era of globalisation, there has been an immense increase in the sage of automobiles and personal
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 has resulted in a various unpleasant affair
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 as global warming and energy crisis which needs to be looked at as the earliest.
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 limiting the practice of owned vehicles can be an effective solution for these issues, it is unrealistic to expect people to switch to public
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 completely and abandon their personal means of transportation. There is no doubt that extensive usage of automobiles has led to rising air pollution due to emission of harmful gases especially in urban cities of many developed countries. These toxic gases have stemmed to health matter
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 as lung cancer and asthma among the urban population.
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, the release of these gases
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 as carbon dioxide and methane from the automobiles due to burning of petroleum products has caused the rise in the level of global warming which has been a serious problem across the globe.
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, the usage of vehicles has been an area of concern for human health as well as for the environment. To address these problems, some public argues that the government should intervene and discourage the mass to use personal vehicles.
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, I personally feel that the above solution can not entirely resolve these issues in the long run.
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, the government should encourage people to utilise public transportation
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 of car
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, people must start switching to
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lectric wagon to prevent vast consumption of exhaustible fuels that are ultimately harming them and the environment;
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 benefitting human beings by having a better quality of life. To conclude, even though unlimited use of cars has led to numerous problems, limiting the usage of them can not be effective for the long term. I believe that switching more to electric ride and mass
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 can help to tackle these troubles in a more constructive way.
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