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I am writing this letter to express my concern about the comments made on the TV show by the reporter of the newpaper.

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I am writing
this
 letter to express my concern about the comments made on the TV
show
 by the reporter of the
newpaper
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newspaper
. The name of
show
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the show
show examples
 is Sherlock Holmes and it is related to solving crimes by the detective. One of your
reporter
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reporters
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, Mr Patrick, while giving
interview
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an interview
show examples
 on the television, complained about the
show
 that
this
 programme is creating fears among the viewers by presenting different kinds of crime scenes. I,
however
, disagree with him as
this
 detective series make people aware
about
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of
show examples
 different
possibilies
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possibilities
possibility
 of criminal activities.
This
 fictional
show
 is very fascinating and it presents different techniques and methods of solving
puzzzles
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puzzles
 with the help of few clues, owing to which I watch
this
show
. Apart from
this
, it
also
assist
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assists
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 me in improving my thinking abilities as
soving
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solving
 of mysteries requires deep thoughts. I request you to take necessary action against the reporter because his words can affect the popularity of the
show
. He made
these allegation
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this allegation
these allegations
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 without analysing the benefits of the
show
. Hope you will take some action against
Mr.
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Mr
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 Patrick.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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