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We can see more disasters and violence show on TV What are its cause and what effects will they exert on the individual and the society

#disasters #violence #show #tv #effects #society
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people
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 are divided in opinion if television is a great
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 of
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 and knowledge or not. Both of these two groups have their reasoning and logic. In
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 essay,I will discuss both the viewpoint to represent the effectiveness and drawbacks of
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 as the
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 of
education
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. To mention the disadvantages, television
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 are too much commercial nowadays and they would produce any program to attract
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 no matter if they are authentic or not. There are plenty of choices for
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 and
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 tend to use their
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 as an entertainment media than an educational
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. The biased news, politically influenced talk show etc. often mislead
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 and that has a very negative impact on the society. Programs that contain violence, negative impression often distracts young
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 and the addiction to
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 programs often restrain
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 from doing other important activities.
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 is a great
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 of knowledge sharing but the choice of the program must be prudent to learn something from it and most of the
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 fail to do so.
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, there are lots of advantages of
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 according to a group and these advantages supersede the disadvantages as they opine. There are always options for a
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 viewer and if s/he takes it as a medium of educational sources, the can always do so. It is an effective medium for updating
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 about the current news, different viewpoints and current affairs.
People
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 no longer need to travel a great deal to learn about other countries and it is a V that actually made it possible.
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 like Discovery, National Geography have been successfully broadcasting
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channels
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 and they are hugely popular around the globe.
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 is a strong tool for a government to communicate with mass
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 to deliver a message. After a stressful day at work
people
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 often find it refreshing to watch music, movies, soap opera, reality shows, travel shows at their homes and there is no argument that those things have their educational references well rooted into. In conclusion,
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 can be a great
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 for
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 if properly and prudently watched and
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 can be a negative factor for some
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 if their program choice is somehow negative.
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