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Some people think children are more successful in foreign language studies than adults. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is indeed a fact that children are more successful in understanding and learning foreign
languages
 than adults. Adolescence is the proper
time
 frame wherein the grasping power of a
child
 is at its best, so I strongly agree that children can do better when it comes to learning different
languages
. The success rate of the
child
 depends upon different factors.
Firstly
, the
child
's brain is at the growing stage and has the capability to grasp new things at a better pace than grown-ups.
In addition
, they are very keen on understanding different
languages
.
Secondly
, young children have fewer responsibilities and so have more
time
 than their elders. Eventually, they have more bandwidth towards acquiring new ventures in their life with a free mind.
Moreover
, the
child
's capability to learn is quite fast as they have more exposure in the academic environment and their skill sets can be easily scalable.
However
, adults are capable enough to learn foreign
languages
 but have less
time
 to focus on their studies. What is more important is the
time
 which they don't have due to their busy schedule.
Secondly
, growing responsibilities in their life
also
 become challenging at some point.
Thus
, ultimately compromising the studies.
Lastly
, the capacity
of
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 grasping new things gradually decreases with age.
For example
, a teenager can understand or learn French as a language quickly than an adult because they can concentrate more efficiently due to their developing brains. In conclusion, I completely agree that concentration level and focus of a
child
 is more than an adult because of which they tend to learn at a faster pace and have a better success rate towards learning foreign
languages
.
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