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Some people believe that violent media directly result in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The severity of
violence
 has been highlighted over the past decades. From
this
 aspect, questions about whether violent
media
 directly results in violent behaviour are raised. In my opinion, violent behaviour is caused by the
media
 to some extent. Irrefutably, an increase in copycat
violence
 occurs.
This
 is because, with the prevalence of
media
, violent contents easily provide a wide range of occasions and
describe
Correct subject-verb agreement
describes
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 the ways of
violence
.
This
 obviously leads individuals with the potential of
violence
 to have a chance to learn about detail the methods of
violence
 and
this
 in turn results in planning similar situations of
violence
,
such
 as domestic, school, and office
violence
. What is more,
although
 the entertainment of
media
 cannot be ignored, the lightness of
violence
 is instilled by
media
. To exemplify, plenty of action films utilise violent
scenes
 just for enjoyment or interest and general dramas illustrate men’s characters who attack someone as methods for manly and fearless.
This
,
therefore
, brings about the incorrect awareness of
violence
 to individuals who have curiosity about
violence
.
Nevertheless
, the public can distinguish what is right from wrong.
In other words
, since a plethora of contents associated with
violence
offer
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 the caution of alarming
scenes
, they sufficiently understand fiction in
scenes
 and the risk of imitation, so they barely like to follow violent
scenes
. To recapitulate, the public can distinguish what is right from wrong but an increase in copycat
violence
 occurs and the lightness of
violence
 is instilled by
media
.
Thus
, violent behaviour is caused by the channels.
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