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It is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medical research. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#animals #food #research
As per the current age of era, the animal is a crucial part of our environment. Indeed, many citizens feel that avoid animal things or
food
 that become a better solution for our regular purpose. In
this
 essay, I completely agree to demonstrate my ideas where we should have to baned
animals
 made
products
 and move to use the alternate resources for our life. There are certain reasons in which animal
products
is
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 bad for our regular appetite. One of the main reason is we are getting chicken or beef in a supermarket has made up of modified genetic
food
 that would bring lots of disease to our health like Diabetes, Cholesterol and Obesity.
Therefore
, Doctors suggest eating green vegetables or beans to your diet. it would be more beneficial than non-veg foods. The
second
 reason which is more sensible that we have an alternate taste like animal
food
. That made up of soybeans with different taste added. Beyond Meat,
for instance
, is the best market product
that is
 selling vegan menu to make a safer world without harm to dairy
animals
.
Although
 people
also
 using leather made materials from animal skins, indirectly harming to our ecology. Expensive
products
 create status in society.
This
 way rich people are showing their luxurious lifestyles but there is a different solution which they can buy with made up of cotton-based product. It is the best way we can respect our nature and its elements.
Moreover
,
animals
 have been used to experimenting with new drugs and are
also
 the source of many medicines, but today we have computer-simulated experiments, which give better results than those done on
animals
.
Therefore
,
animals
 are not needed anymore in
this
 field
also
. to sum up, animal killing is not good to make our lifestyle better. I believe that we have different solutions which we can make a better society to reject animal
food
 or
products
 to our lifestyles.
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