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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion

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In many
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countries
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 high wages are being earned by some individuals.
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 few notions think that the authorities should cap the
saleries
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salaries
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other
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says
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its
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 is very crucial for
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 growth of the nation.
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both view by stating my thoughts.
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 begin with,
people
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 are getting their pay according to their
work
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 abilities, skills and their education which motivate
people
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 to get
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 education to compete with others.
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 it
also
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encourage
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people
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 to
work
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 hard so that they can complete their assignment in
given
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 time to get
high
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 amount for their job.
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, the person will get high
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amount
 of
money
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 will
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 have to pay fruitful tax to the government and it
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 helps in
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 growth of the country.
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, a large
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amount
 of
money
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 bring some
benfits
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benefits
 to the country, but
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 have a negative impact on the community.
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, the
goverment
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government
 should fix minimum salary for every individual and they should
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 put some boundaries for high wages so that
people
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 do not
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 their life
in
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 risk to get great
amonut
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amount
 of
money
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.
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, if the authorities will control the
saleries
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salaries
 it will
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 help to increase the job
oppertunity
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opportunity
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 because
employer
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the employer
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 will higher another person
instead
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 of putting
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work load
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 on one person. In conclusion,
the
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great wages encourage
people
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 to
work
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 hard to achieve the same amount of
money
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like
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 others.
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 the government should fix the salaries which will reduce
the
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unemployment.
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