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In a number of countries, some people think that is it necessary to spend large sums of money on construction new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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 it is sometimes thought that substantial amount of
money
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 ought to be spent to develop a new
railway
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 to provide high-speed transportation between
cities
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, other
people
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 believe that the
money
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 should be utilized on enhancing current public
transport
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. In my opinion, I consider that the
money
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 has to be used to upgrade the existing
transport
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 rather than building a new
railway
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe that
money
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 should be spent to increase the quality of public
transport
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 in providing better services and I agree.
In other words
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, improving the public service allows more
people
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 to opted to utilize the service and as the result government income will be growth and the
money
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 can be used to build and improve other public services.
For example
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, the typical problem for a
railway
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 is the delivery, which commonly delays for more than 15 minutes.
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, increasing the speed of the arrival
time
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 will absolutely enhance the quality of public
transport
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.
Furthermore
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, improving public
transport
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 is vital to ensure the
first
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transport
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 for the
people
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 to choose is
transport
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 prepare by the government which directly able to reduce traffics overwhelmed.
On the other hand
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, it is often believed that it is better if the
money
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 allocated to develop a new
railway
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 line to deliver high-speed trains between
cities
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.
This
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 to ensure the travel
time
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 is minimal for those
people
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 that travelling between
cities
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.
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,
people
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 who work in different
cities
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 able to arrive at their workplace on
time
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. Without executing
this
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 project,
people
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 have to manage their
time
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 wisely in going to other
cities
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. Another reason is that due to technology constraint as the old
railway
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 might not be able to sustain pressure produce by the train.
Hence
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, building the new
railway
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 is an accurate action in assuring the safety of the passenger. In conclusion, while many
people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think
that is
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 better to increase the existing public
transport
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 to maximize government income and fulfil
people
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 satisfaction in using public
transport
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.
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