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You have been invited to speak at your old high school. Write to the school. In your letter: make a suggestion about what you could speak about find out how long you will need to speak for ask how many people will be there

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Dear Principal Simpson, First of all, I'd like to say thank you very much for the offer to come and address the students at my former school. It would be a privilege for me to give a talk and to see the old place again. The invitation was quite open regarding the topic of the speech, so I was wondering whether you think it appropriate to talk about my career. As you may know, I have spent a considerable amount of time over the
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 12 years travelling as part of my job, and I have had the opportunity to see some amazing places that I think would interest the students. It would help me to plan my presentation if you could let me know the approximate time that I should expect to be speaking
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 numbers, as I will be able to bring a data projector to show some photographs if a large turnout is expected. I am looking forward to seeing you again and hope my visit will be a success. Brian
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task achievement
Provide a clearer closing statement requesting a reply or confirmation.
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The letter covers all required tasks: suggesting a topic, asking about the duration and audience size.
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The tone is polite and professional, suitable for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
The letter is logically structured and each paragraph flows well to follow the introduction, main points, and closing.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making the letter easy to read and understand.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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